tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post8572417411146478951..comments2023-10-02T08:44:14.460-07:00Comments on Kim or Lisa: Lost In The SmokeKimolisahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16624029898830661332noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-25347096258248925932013-09-26T05:47:00.244-07:002013-09-26T05:47:00.244-07:00There is a lot of fire behind all his smoke, passi...There is a lot of fire behind all his smoke, passion but subtle, learned beyond a blackboard, weathered in life's frailties, wisdom via suffering.<br />This is a powerful story, full of lessons. What else might he say? I gotta find him.<br />Cheers!Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12823532229269308280noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-29543190458790328862013-09-25T15:34:24.793-07:002013-09-25T15:34:24.793-07:00wow..loved this, excellent dialogue and profound w...wow..loved this, excellent dialogue and profound wisdom woven expertly through this poem. fantastic writeDorianna (paintswithwords)http://paintswithwords.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-83360793542901443472013-09-24T16:30:30.805-07:002013-09-24T16:30:30.805-07:00dang. that was really good...great dialogue and di...dang. that was really good...great dialogue and dialect...and what a wise man as well on the ways of men and women....great story telling...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-69599354818719200372013-09-24T16:25:02.960-07:002013-09-24T16:25:02.960-07:00Wow, this is amazing, a wonderful story filled wit...Wow, this is amazing, a wonderful story filled with wisdom, I felt entwined in this story as if I was there so real...just Brilliant!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-45542713898246077922013-09-23T20:40:13.341-07:002013-09-23T20:40:13.341-07:00Kimolisa, the colloquial monologue is brilliant. ...Kimolisa, the colloquial monologue is brilliant. I could hear the Jamaican "song" in every line.<br /><br />Whether the Rasta Man was real or an apparition matters not. The point is, this man has discovered the truth about not loving his wife, and now the painful next steps await.<br /><br />Mesmerizing piece. Thanks for linking at Real Toads! ToadAmySharp Little Pencilhttp://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/09/23/oral-fixation/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-46741437820302305612013-09-23T19:58:52.518-07:002013-09-23T19:58:52.518-07:00magic - tautly woven and imaginedmagic - tautly woven and imaginedAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-52222734532567312682013-09-23T11:06:25.555-07:002013-09-23T11:06:25.555-07:00
words came from the depth of truth...........like...<br />words came from the depth of truth...........like the storyline..........Sumana Royhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17333363799083094084noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-54793646844189839352013-09-23T10:31:57.684-07:002013-09-23T10:31:57.684-07:00I agreed with the wisdom about love, be it man or ...I agreed with the wisdom about love, be it man or woman--but that aside, this is a wonderful ballad-like narrative with conflict and mystery as the narrator tries to ignore ancient deep rooted wisdom. Hard to see outside the box defined by money and possessions. Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-69503604827794029252013-09-23T10:17:32.477-07:002013-09-23T10:17:32.477-07:00Your reeled me right in to this well-told story. Y...Your reeled me right in to this well-told story. You have the dialogue down to perfection. A lot of wisdom in this message.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-55119698936895994872013-09-23T09:50:58.721-07:002013-09-23T09:50:58.721-07:00painful wisdom is wisdom nonetheless... your writi...painful wisdom is wisdom nonetheless... your writing is wonderfully thoughtful.Laurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15349928247626849914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-53263866458915855482013-09-23T08:33:49.240-07:002013-09-23T08:33:49.240-07:00You had me hooked. Love how the story unfolds, th...You had me hooked. Love how the story unfolds, the words of wisdom and the truth.Kathryn Dychehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17175563748388497142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2617069594261001276.post-91306811819847240002013-09-23T05:59:04.726-07:002013-09-23T05:59:04.726-07:00Brilliant write, as usual... you are such a beauti...Brilliant write, as usual... you are such a beautiful storyteller...<br /><br />"A woman needs to be loved,<br />Breth'ren. Love her in<br />De touch of yuh hand,<br />De words yuh speak,<br />De look in yuh eye."<br /><br />Truer words never spoken...<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10094116226854880072noreply@blogger.com