Monday, November 5, 2012

A Frog's Life

Tadpoles swim in the
Pond. The old bull frog croaked
For the very last time.


Another attempt at Haiku, I think this is the closest I've gotten to the traditional, Japanese form. 

Submitted to imaginary garden with real toads and dVerse Poets Open Links.

16 comments:

Brian Miller said...

haha...like the play with croaked...and for the last time...

my poem today is my first haiku as well...

Behind the Smile said...

This is intersting, I had not come across a haiku poem. The beginning of life with the tadpoles and the ending with the toad dying. Life and death. Thank you for sharing.

Margaret said...

...and the season must be spring!!! A true Haiku is supposed to hint at a season, I believe. Nicely done.

Carrie Burtt said...

...all in the day of a toad....a wonderful Haiku! :-)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Yikes! I am relating to the frog. Is that a bad thing? Hee hee. Love it!

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Life and death in one perfect phrase. I'd say you mastered it. Is that your face on the cover of Martine?

Abin Chakraborty said...

very well crafted!

Kimolisa said...

Thanks for the positive feedback, I must say this is my favourite in terms of Haiku. No, that's not me on the cover of Martine, butI think I will take a picture like it of myself and use it as my social media pics

Herotomost said...

Great haiku with a huge range for such a shoty. Loved it.

Nimue said...

beautiful even if sad ..

Pat Hatt said...

Great use of croak, and the circle of life rings true.

hedgewitch said...

You paint the cycle of life vividly in so few words.

Mary said...

As young are born, the old die. Such is life whatever the species. I think you did well with the haiku form. Smiles.

Kim Nelson said...

Regarding message and meaning, you've certainly met the intent of Haiku. And I love the reference to both ends of the life cycle.

ayala said...

Nice :)

kaykuala said...

Great haiku! I love haiku as it's short but disciplined. Nicely, Kim

Hank

 
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